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Rate My Neopets Descriptions please!!!


Naamah D.

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My Usul

 

"My name is Asikai. I was once simple farmer's daughter until the sky turned to black. Along with the sky my heart also turned pure black. Now I reside in my tower alone waiting for my heart to turn light and beautiful once more. For now, I shall remain a princess of darkness."

 

My Hissi

 

"Fishing is so relaxing. I could sit in my boat on the clear blue water for hours. Waiting for my next catch. Outside of fishing, I'm always outside. Be it gardening, swimming, or playing basketball, I am truley a Neopet of the outdoors."

 

My Aisha

 

"Out of all the Aishas, I am the most beautiful. My designer clothes and pretty purple hair say it all. LiliAnna or Ann as the other girls at the country club call me, is the best. "

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very nice :) expand on these stories if u can :)

 

as for Hissi .. u said Outside of fishing, I'm always outside.

 

it's better to say "Aside from fishing ... "

 

Thanks for reading them! I'm terrible with grammer....but I like to write. :laughingsmiley:

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