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Zac

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I am applying for a shadow krawk from NeoLodge and I need some people to rate it and suggest what is best. ;)

 

Here is my application

 

Here is the list of rules

 

Note: The rules are very long. But I would appreciate if you read them :yes:

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first call her Mawi(its obvius from her about me tpage that that is her name)

 

it also seems she dosnt mind if you want to paint him so if you do i would add in what you would paint him if not then jsut ignore this. i also highly suggest doing some 'makeables' and adding them even if you suck at that kinda thing, it shows effort. you also might want to add a krawk into your title image that has his name, you can jsut use a neopets image for that.

 

im not sure if posting blogs you have made would be a good thing to be on there or not since its not really related. i think make yourself some makeables(obviusly link back to the people they are from) attempt even a crappy mspaint drawing or somthign of the pet, again i dont think she really cares if you are good at all(look at the petlookup of him) she just wants the effort. and then for more space filler after those you could add some adobtables since she awllows those(again only if you have some of your own 'art' and if you link back properly) also make sure todo those all in eitehr his current color or the color you will make him.

 

change this line"I can assure you that he will be cared for as if he was my own." it kinda sounds like even tho you have him he wouldnt be yours.. which isnt what she wants. make it be somthing more like "as my own" because if you do get him he will be yours.

 

even if your not a roleplayer i would also maybe try to give him a personality.

 

she also mentions that he shoudl have a petpet so you should find one that you would buy for him and put that info on the page

..err actully after reading jsut make a section in your gallery called "Gifts for Canno" put in books codestones a petpet for him some tyos gromming items, or even battledome stuff since you plan on using him for that

 

you also need to confirm some where on it that you do have AIM

 

 

--errr you asked... lol

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I think it looks really good! Perhaps on the banner at the top you may like to put a Shadow Krawk, rather than an Electric one, but other than that... its amazing! I know I would have loved to get an application that good when I adopted out my Koi, it would've made the decision so much easier :D

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