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Your layout looks nice. However, I'm going to go full editor mode on the content. I try and preserve your words and meaning as best I can, so most of my suggestions will be grammar, punctuation, and clarification. I'm not trying to devalue or ridicule your work, just make it read more smoothly. Please feel free to take my suggestions or leave them as you see fit. I've put it in a big spoiler tag so the edits aren't just out there.

 

 

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I hope that helps! Aside from the minor concerns I addressed, it's a lovely application. I hope you get the pets!

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You might also want to link to your sides (instead of just listing them) as well as your pets. Because I know most owners will want to look through all your accounts and pets to see how you treat your current pets, as a base for how you will treat the pets you are applying for :) Doing this will just make it a little easier for them.

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  On 6/3/2014 at 3:03 AM, Anime said:

Your layout looks nice. However, I'm going to go full editor mode on the content. I try and preserve your words and meaning as best I can, so most of my suggestions will be grammar, punctuation, and clarification. I'm not trying to devalue or ridicule your work, just make it read more smoothly. Please feel free to take my suggestions or leave them as you see fit. I've put it in a big spoiler tag so the edits aren't just out there.

 

 

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I hope that helps! Aside from the minor concerns I addressed, it's a lovely application. I hope you get the pets!

I went through everything you said and fixed it. Thank you so much! You reallly improved my chances at adopting Pyper and Cerralyn! Everything you said was so thorough I was so excitied! I feel much better now :)

 

  On 6/3/2014 at 9:11 AM, Rune Valentine said:

You might also want to link to your sides (instead of just listing them) as well as your pets. Because I know most owners will want to look through all your accounts and pets to see how you treat your current pets, as a base for how you will treat the pets you are applying for :) Doing this will just make it a little easier for them.

Thats a really good idea! thanks! I added it.

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