Neopian Times Submission Was Rejected...

[May.]

so, i submitted my very first entry to the neopian times.

(with the help of the TDN guide. xD)

though, i figured i would've gotten rejected,

'cause i couldn't find anyone to look over my work. :(

now i'm trying to look over my work, again,

but i can't seem to figure out what TNT meant in the neomail when they said:

Please separate each character's spoken words into a new paragraph.

o_O

 

thanks for the help! ^_^

p.s: would anyone be willing to look over my entry after i edit it? please? :*

[Ali Cat]

By that sentence, they mean when a character is starting to talk, then you should put it in a new paragraph.

Example:

 

"It's cold out," said Joe.

 

"Not if you have a jacket!" replied Bob.

 

Or, if you are doing a more descriptive paragraph, don't start dialogue in the middle of it.

 

Example:

 

It was cold out that day, and Joe was getting tired.

 

"It's cold out," said Joe.

 

"Not if you have a jacket!" replied Bob.

 

They do not want you doing this:

 

"It's cold out," said Joe. "Not if you have a jacket!" replied Bob.

 

or

 

It was cold out that day, and Joe was getting tired. "It's cold out," said Joe.

 

"Not if you have a jacket!" replied Bob.

 

Good luck getting into the neopian times! ^^ I'm not much of an editer, sorry :(

If you were doing both of those, then I really don't know what else they could be talking about ;(

 

Edit

And sorry about going example crazy xD Wanted to make sure I would cover your problem, though.

[May.]

By that sentence, they mean when a character is starting to talk, then you should put it in a new paragraph.

Example:

 

"It's cold out," said Joe.

 

"Not if you have a jacket!" replied Bob.

 

Good luck getting into the neopian times! ^^ I'm not much of an editer, sorry :(

 

ohh, :O

thank you so much! ^_^

i was so confused. xD

 

& aw, it's okay, neither am i; as you can tell. xD

[ΩCCΩ]

I lover reading and writing and I would have helped you but when it comes to grammer and spellings then I am helpless.

[Snakeystew]

I would be more than happy to proof read it for you as long as it's in English :)

[May.]

I lover reading and writing and I would have helped you but when it comes to grammer and spellings then I am helpless.

 

ahah, yeah, it's kinda the same case for me; ^_^

i can usually proof read other people's work,

but when it comes to my own, i'm hopeless. xD

 

I would be more than happy to proof read it for you as long as it's in English :)

 

:O, really?

that'd be great, thanks! ^_^

i haven't finished editing it yet, though. :(

& yep, it's in english. xD

can i neomail it to you whenever i finish? :)

(which may take a while; since i'm kinda lazy :*)

[Snakeystew]

Yes, feel free to neomail me whenever you're ready.