Ellie_Penguin Posted January 18, 2008 Share Posted January 18, 2008 I just wanted to share a poem I just wrote in 5 minutes. Yes, I get inspired by the smallest thing XD. I haven't picked a title, yet. Maybe you can help me pick one XD. If you want to read other poems I wrote, just go to the Awesome Contest topic and you'll find them there. Anyways, it's a sort of Rhyme poem, but not an official Rhyme. Mind through life. Destiny at heart by Ellie The path to destiny will shine upon your own thoughts resigning the mind of the lost part of the heart breaks, when you love. Your own game of destinations a paradise where there is darkness a place where you know things don't seem to really matter A book of lines where the author tells lies only the last page contains the truth you won't deny Tiles of memories which you refuse to investigate but part of the inner experience will only be able to tell what it means to say and to think you can make a change. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Levy Posted January 18, 2008 Share Posted January 18, 2008 I got a title. How about Destiny's Illusion? Do you have a dA page? If you do you should upload this. ^_^ Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ellie_Penguin Posted January 18, 2008 Author Share Posted January 18, 2008 Nope, I don't have an account there. That's a good title =thinks=. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
antiaircraft Posted January 18, 2008 Share Posted January 18, 2008 I agree with Levy's title suggestion. And as far as the poem is concerned: :thumbsup: Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ellie_Penguin Posted January 18, 2008 Author Share Posted January 18, 2008 Well, the poem is more about a feeling towards your own life and your mind and destiny. I think I'm going to call it, "Mind through Life" Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
antiaircraft Posted January 18, 2008 Share Posted January 18, 2008 Or how about "Mind through Life, Life through the Heart"? I dunno if it's really that relevant... it just popped into my head. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ellie_Penguin Posted January 18, 2008 Author Share Posted January 18, 2008 "Mind through life. Destiny at heart." How's that? I combined our 3 ideas XD. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
antiaircraft Posted January 19, 2008 Share Posted January 19, 2008 Sounds good to me. :D *Is still rereading the poem* Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ellie_Penguin Posted January 19, 2008 Author Share Posted January 19, 2008 Are you re-reading because it's good? Or because there are mistakes? LOL. I want to know XD. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Hubert Posted January 20, 2008 Share Posted January 20, 2008 Holy. Fantastic work, and a nice title also. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ellie_Penguin Posted January 20, 2008 Author Share Posted January 20, 2008 Thanks! Levy and AA helped me pick the title. I combined our ideas together XD. Here's a new poem that I just wrote. Took me around 6 minutes and it is about people who are afraid of speaking up and those who follow others (in a bad way) thinking it is the right thing, when in fact it isn't. A Dark Herd Pure darkness above the trail by the end where there is shame down the bridge where people fail but then who is to blame? The herd will make seamless paths underneath a field of dust to hide their own wraths neither of them knows who to trust Stuck in their own pile who will go and who will stay some will say they're vile but there are those who have their own say Trapped in an earthly shell where the curious will open and break free it's part of their dwell some of them will make a plea Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
antiaircraft Posted January 21, 2008 Share Posted January 21, 2008 Are you re-reading because it's good? Or because there are mistakes? LOL. I want to know XD. I'm basically reappreciating the poem, partly since it's good and partly since I was half-asleep the first few times I read it. :P And I would give you a triple thumbs up for the second poem but I only have two thumbs. I can really relate it to what I observe around me (in school and such I've always been the odd one out - but I'm the odd one out who's studying everybody else and taking notes (: ). Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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