I just wanted to share a poem I just wrote in 5 minutes. Yes, I get inspired by the smallest thing XD. I haven't picked a title, yet. Maybe you can help me pick one XD. If you want to read other poems I wrote, just go to the Awesome Contest topic and you'll find them there.

 

Anyways, it's a sort of Rhyme poem, but not an official Rhyme.

 

Mind through life. Destiny at heart

by Ellie

The path to destiny

will shine upon your own thoughts

resigning the mind of the lost

part of the heart breaks, when you love.

 

Your own game of destinations

a paradise where there is darkness

a place where you know

things don't seem to really matter

 

A book of lines

where the author tells lies

only the last page contains

the truth you won't deny

 

Tiles of memories

which you refuse to investigate

but part of the inner experience

will only be able to tell

what it means to say

and to think you can make a change.

 

I got a title. How about Destiny's Illusion?

Do you have a dA page? If you do you should upload this. ^_^

Nope, I don't have an account there. That's a good title =thinks=.

I agree with Levy's title suggestion.

 

And as far as the poem is concerned: :thumbsup:

Well, the poem is more about a feeling towards your own life and your mind and destiny. I think I'm going to call it, "Mind through Life"

Or how about "Mind through Life, Life through the Heart"? I dunno if it's really that relevant... it just popped into my head.

"Mind through life. Destiny at heart." How's that? I combined our 3 ideas XD.

Sounds good to me. :D

 

*Is still rereading the poem*

Are you re-reading because it's good? Or because there are mistakes? LOL. I want to know XD.

Holy. Fantastic work, and a nice title also.

Thanks! Levy and AA helped me pick the title. I combined our ideas together XD.

 

Here's a new poem that I just wrote. Took me around 6 minutes and it is about people who are afraid of speaking up and those who follow others (in a bad way) thinking it is the right thing, when in fact it isn't.

 

 

A Dark Herd

 

Pure darkness above the trail

by the end where there is shame

down the bridge where people fail

but then who is to blame?

 

The herd will make seamless paths

underneath a field of dust

to hide their own wraths

neither of them knows who to trust

 

Stuck in their own pile

who will go and who will stay

some will say they're vile

but there are those who have their own say

 

Trapped in an earthly shell

where the curious will open and break free

it's part of their dwell

some of them will make a plea

 

 

Are you re-reading because it's good? Or because there are mistakes? LOL. I want to know XD.

I'm basically reappreciating the poem, partly since it's good and partly since I was half-asleep the first few times I read it. :P

 

And I would give you a triple thumbs up for the second poem but I only have two thumbs. I can really relate it to what I observe around me (in school and such I've always been the odd one out - but I'm the odd one out who's studying everybody else and taking notes (: ).