Shya Posted July 25, 2007 Share Posted July 25, 2007 Oh sleeper of snow, the frost is deep Time to wake from blessed sleep If you rise not, I will not fear For you are harmless lying there In caves where glacial angels weep The one with hail-dust as your heir. Guarding treasure of eternal cost Treasure shining in the frost. So... what do you think? Critisize it as much as you want, only try to give suggestions. That is, helpful critisism! This post has been edited by a member of staff (Angel Anime) because of a violation of the forum rules. Please do not double post. The AdBot dose not count as a post. Please check your user inbox to see if you have been contacted regarding this incident, then review our rules. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
YoSmiles Posted June 14, 2008 Share Posted June 14, 2008 Oooh that is really good! Idk how to criticize it lol but keep writing but about real life :D I'm also into writing and poetry This topic has been edited by a member of staff (Anime) because of a violation of the forum rules. Do not post on topics more than 14 days old. Please check your user inbox to see if you have been contacted regarding this incident, then review our rules. Per the reason above, this topic has been LOCKED. Please contact Anime if you have any questions regarding this action. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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