The Original Luna Posted March 11, 2007 Share Posted March 11, 2007 13 Day of Hunting, Year 6. 07:00 – Was woken by the bell. King Skarl wants his breakfast, early in bed. Lucky for him, he doesn’t know about my secret stash of emergency food. 07:10 – Skarl wants his second breakfast. I served it with seconds to spare. – At this rate with my emergency food stash running low, Skarl’s stomach will have more than one tyre to spare. 07:30 – Listened to the page-pet, County, read the news about this lord, from the Darigan lands. An Eyrie called Kass, who has taken over from Lord Darigan… Whoever he is. I’ll bet that’ll rest heavy on Skarl’s stomach! 08:30- Finally had time to eat my breakfast! No Skarl pestering me for more food, no, just me and my…. Very small potato. *sigh* I don’t even like potatoes, why not a big juicy Marrow or a basket of berries from Meriacres farm? I hear the dung surprise there is delicious, but somehow I don’t want to know what the surprise is. 09:20- Prepared the feast for the banquet tonight. I hear tell every famous person will be there from Jeran to Illusen the Faerie! 10:00 – Someone made a complete mess of the kitchen while poor little innocent me was cleaning the dishes. I hate to name names, *cough*Danner*cough* but that person has doubled my workload and that makes me an angry Gelert. 11:00- Poor, poor Danner got his head stuck in a pail. Somebody put soap under the door *sweet eyes*, and Danner slipped on it, knocked into the cupboard and the bucket fell on his head. 12:30 – Danner’s still got a bucket stuck on his head. I am so tempted to walk up to him, knock on the bucket, and say something crazy like, “Are you alright in there Danner?†or start telling knock-knock jokes just to annoy him. After all he did annoy little Weela-the-totally-innocent. 13:00 –Skarl has just ordered one of the most largest five course lunches I’ve ever had to cook – EVER! All I have to do now is bake this fish without burning or dropping it. Oops… I think I may need a new fish, seeing that I’ve gone and burnt and dropped it! 16:00 – I finally finished preparing the meal. I traded the fish for one of my specialities – Grackle stuffed Turkey! Sometimes I wonder if it’s worth cooking for King Skarl. Three hours work demolished in three minutes! All these meals I have to cook, and I’ve never heard most of the ingredients! I mean, what on Neopia is a Coconut?! I have to make a coconut surprise as a side-dish to Golden Juppie mash with squash rolls! A golden Juppie?! They’re only a myth! 16:01- Ok, Golden Juppies are definitely NOT a myth. Ethelrae, the head cook scolded me for not knowing. Big Deal. She only got that job because she’s Skarl’s second cousin umpteen times removed. 17:00- The Juppie mix isn’t cooking right! And Danner’s pestering me, saying that he’ll tell Skarl that I’m not working. So what?? I’ll tell Skarl that Danner missed parole to sneak all those specially imported Bagusses into his quarters. He doesn’t know I know it. But two can play at that game. 18:00 Someone decided to sneak Slorgs into Danner’s quarters. I won’t name names, but I loved the expression on his face when he saw all those Slorgs munching on all those Bagusses! 20:00- All the guests have arrived, my Juppie mix has worked fine and now I have time to relax until tomorrow. What that Apache? Illusen’s brought her own feast? Ready made! Excuse me while I scream the castle down. They say I have a voice like a Kadoatie! 22:00- I think I may have closed the banquet early by screaming. Peasants came running in to tell of a monster, they’ll never know. Oh and I got to eat the Juppie meal- tastes better than any old potato. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
julie_kofoed1980 Posted March 11, 2007 Share Posted March 11, 2007 I like it :D it's a really fun story ! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Lightning Strike Posted March 14, 2007 Share Posted March 14, 2007 It's nice, but quite repetitive. I mean, the structure is well formed, but the problem lies in the character. You repeat too many times the name of the other characters, which makes it boring after a while. Also, you include well elaborated humor, but irregularly distributed. Some passages are funny, others are tedious. Also, try to focus on other activities instead of cooking, etc. Resuming, it's a funny story, but needs some improvement to make it into the Neopian Times. Never give up, though! 6.5/10 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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