A Poem dedicated to my mother!

[Mini-Chan]

I just made this poem, for my mom! It's a tribute poem! We're doing them

for English class!

 

so I decided to post it here :]

 

A life to live, a life to adore,

A gift from my mother,

Just for me.

My existence is meaning,

I know that’s the truth.

 

Mother, dear mother,

I thank you so much,

Every time I’m queasy,

You’re always there by my side.

The things you’ve taught me,

Like looking at life positively,

I cherish to heart.

 

Your radiant smile,

My sun, day and night,

Always there to cheer me up,

On my days of despair.

The one I admire,

My shining moonlit star,

To guide me along,

On the journey of life.

 

 

its not that good cuz im still a beginner X3

please tell me whatchas think about it! that way i can improve :]

[Dillon]

I think it is really good. but as always there is room for improvement. Where I dont know?

[Hannah]

It's good... but in my opinion it would be better if it rhymed. But Im like that with most poems XD

 

6/10

[Justin]

I have the same comments as Hannah but the content is really good. I am actually slightly moved. :yes: Nice poem overall.

[Mini-Chan]

thanks :]

see, my english teacher was like,

'YOU DON'T HAVE TO RHYME!'

i tried to make most parts sound good...w/o rhymin...

i love to rhyme...sometimes its just hard to find the

right words though! XDD

[Dillon]

Its more about rhythm then rhyme.