Creeper unidog Posted March 8, 2007 Share Posted March 8, 2007 wandering in the dark streets of manila....(Manila is a place in the philippines) a girl seeing children with their mothers thinking about the last time her mother hugged her but the last time she saw her mother ever was gruesome.....the little girl peeked in a door which all the screams were coming from...and she saw her drunken dad killing her mom stab by stab...but never knew she was dead since she was very little then.Her dad would say she left her and her dad for another guy and will never comeback...hearing this the girl immediately packed her things and ran away looking for her mom. Last time anybody saw her was when she was sitting on a lonely street lying down about to die. BUt nobody cared for this cruel world never understanded her. when she was about to die she only had one thought...that after this cruel life she will see her mother again. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shya Posted July 25, 2007 Share Posted July 25, 2007 It's... rather dark.... and a bit pessimistic.... It's nicely written but would be better if you corrected the grammar and spelling. That would make it a lot easier to read. Although isn't it a bit... dark..? This was edited by Anime. The edit was reverted by Samuel. For details of this edit, any staff member may contact Samuel via PM. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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