Two Small Hands (Poem)

[livvy]

Okay, I wrote this when Michael and his girlfriend broke up. He was WAY too attached to her. I suppose I ought to be used to holding other people's broken hearts. I've done it before. But it never gets any easier...

 

In my hands this heart is beating

The gruesome rhythm keeps repeating

A feeble pulse, a gush of blood

My tiny hands can't stop the flood

Of bitter tears in steady streams

The pain of loss, of broken dreams

Of promises that won't be kept

Of empty arms where once she slept

 

I can't replace the love he felt

Or make the icy silence melt

Or cause the pain to go away

All I can do is kneel and pray

And do my best to understand

This breaking heart in two small hands

 

This is pretty different from my other poems, but hopefully it's still good.

[lesia9920]

I really really like it you must do alot of writing~ I would love to see more of what you do I mean maybe past writings~

[livvy]

Thanks! I can only write poetry when I feel something so strongly that I can't explain it in normal language, which doesn't happen too terribly often.

I've posted two other poems... I can try to dig up some more if you'd like.

[Unstream]

Very nice poem. :yes: I like it.

 

I say one day you're gonna be a famous poet.

[livvy]

Ha, thanks, but I doubt I will be. I can't force myself to write on deadline. I don't think publishers would like that too much. =P

[Stephé]

Awww........that sounds so sad :(

 

I find writing poems are a great way to express your emotions. Even though they might not make sense to other people, or if it ends up into a writing mush, it'll help.

 

But its a very emotional poem Livvy. Nicely written. ;)

[livvy]

It was a pretty painful time. But it's better now. :)

 

I don't like this poem as much as the other two I posted, because it's harder to connect to. It really helped at the time though, and I guess that's what matters.

[antiaircraft]

Ha, thanks, but I doubt I will be. I can't force myself to write on deadline. I don't think publishers would like that too much. =P

Well I say you're good enough a poet to have the publishers struggling to stay ahead of your deadlines. :P

 

And I don't know about other people, but personally I find this poem quite easy to connect to - it's a situation I've run across more times than I like to recall. :( But yeah, your writing is exceptionally good at carrying emotions and thoughts across!

[cthurman21]

Love your poem. Would love to see more of it.. :D Keep up the good work.

[Unstream]

Ha, thanks, but I doubt I will be. I can't force myself to write on deadline. I don't think publishers would like that too much. =P

Well, most artists don't have a deadline, unless they're being hired to write/draw/make something.

 

And you could always be a one-hit wonder, like Harper Lee :P

 

 

But what do you mean by it's harder to connect to?

[lesia9920]

I will go read the other 2 ~ I have a friend that has/had been writing poetry for a long time he saved all his work and now has a book a Target~ cant remember the name right off hand but its something to think about over time Im sure you will find alot too write about ~:) We (him and I) are almost 40 now so it was a work over time thing nothing that was pushed~

[livvy]

Well I say you're good enough a poet to have the publishers struggling to stay ahead of your deadlines. :P

Well, most artists don't have a deadline, unless they're being hired to write/draw/make something.

 

And you could always be a one-hit wonder, like Harper Lee :P

Ha, well I might publish something... one day. Shall I send you all a signed copy if I do? :P

 

I will go read the other 2 ~ I have a friend that has/had been writing poetry for a long time he saved all his work and now has a book a Target~ cant remember the name right off hand but its something to think about over time Im sure you will find alot too write about ~:) We (him and I) are almost 40 now so it was a work over time thing nothing that was pushed~

The other two poems are Stuck in Between and Friends, Right?